He went through my script, animatic and storyboards of both versions of my story and we agreed on:
After the introduction of the character (she is dying, because of the atomic bomb radiation,...), the character needs to go on a journey, she needs to be driven by something strong (a wish to run again) and she can only achieve that through making 1000 cranes. Just before the end - after reaching the climax with conflict side (the illnes), she needs to realise that there is something strnger out there, something that she is fighting for - a wish for world's peace and running becomes secondary. The resolution - the afterlife- she changes into the crane.
The change in the story begins when she looks through the window in the hospital- she watches the kids playing outside (we show her sad, then we cut to what she is watching) and after that- the flash back on the happy days when se was running happens.We need to show that through different way of animation (maybe stop-frame look,...)
So... there will need to be some changes....